30 Mart 2014 Pazar

DIVISION ESSAY- FIRST DRAFT

                             THE CHANGES IN CLOTHING AND STYLE

     The clothing and style of people are changing day by day. In this changing, periods and movements play an important role. When we look the recent past, many currents and their effects can be seen clearly. Therefore, in term of these movements period, clothing and style can be viewed in three different times and these are the 1970s, 1980s, and 1990s.

      First, we can see the current and their effects on people’s clothing and style in the 1970s. Toward the end of the 1960s, the young started a movement against the system, consumption and people who were called hippies were revealed. They were the children of love and freedom. They had a motto and it was “Make love not war.” In addition to this, the youth of this movement created their own unique style of dressing. Colourful clothes, large floral patterns were the main clothing. As well as long skirts, boots, and dresses were widely used.

       Second, we can see the movement and their effects on people’s clothing and style in the 1980s. In the 80s, women began to work in managerial positions in business. In order to appear stronger than they were, they started to choose more masculine clothes. To show shoulders broad, they preferred to big shoulder pads and short hair. On the other hand, youth were in another world. Due to the Disco Era, young people started to wear clothes in bright, fluorescent colours. They tried to emulate Madonna and Michael Jackson.

         Finally, we can see the differences and their effects on people’s clothing in 1990s. In these years, anew trend which was called “Grunge” started to spread. Young people gave up on brightly coloured clothes and began to wear relax and shabby clothes. The clothes which they wore were military boots, sweaters, plaid shirts, and ample jeans. Additionally, there were also changes in women’s clothing. Most of them began to appear more feminine. As a result of their self-esteem, there was an increase in formfitting clothes.

           In conclusion, the periods and movements have an important role on people’s clothing and style. When we look the periods, we can easily see the changes in clothing. In my opinion, these changes will continue throughout the history of mankind. Maybe, one day, people begin to wear dresses in a very different style from our period and they might see us as strange people.



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Thesis Statement: Therefore, in term of these movements period, clothing and style can be viewed in three different times and these are the 1970s, 1980s, and 1990s.

1.    The 1970s
a.     Hippies
-         The children of love and freedom
-         Their motto 
b.    Their own style of dressing
-         Colourful clothes
-         Skirts, boots, dresses


2.    The 1980s
a.     Women began to work in managerial positions.
-         The more masculine clothes
-         Shoulder pads, short hair
b.    The young
-         Disco Era
-         Madonna and M. Jackson

3.    The 1990s
a.     Grunge
-         Relax and shabby clothes
-         Military boots, sweaters, plaid shirts, ample jeans
b.    The changes in women’s clothing
-         To appear more feminine
-         Formfitting clothes


   Conclusion

4 yorum:

  1. anew trend ---> spelling
    When we look the periods ---> missing a preposition

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  2. Bu yorum yazar tarafından silindi.

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  3. I wrote correct but in here, it is seen as false. You are right.

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  4. 1-) Therefore, in term ( something is missing here) of these movements period, ... (paragraph 1, line 4)

    2-) First, we can see the current and their(pronoun agreement) effects on people’s clothing and style in the 1970s. (paragraph 2, 3, 4 , line 1)

    3-) Toward the end of the 1960s, the young(word formation) started a movement against the system, (paragraph 2, line 3)

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