2 Mayıs 2014 Cuma

Argumentative Essay- First Draft

FREE EDUCATION
                                                              OKAN ŞAHİN
                                                           02. 05. 2014
The opinion that college or university education should be tuition free for-all-policy is very controversial. Some people think that it is beneficial for their country, some people don’t. Even though making all schools free can be very expensive for state economy, I think its advantages are valuable. And there are several reasons why university education should be free for everyone.
First, the most powerful reason of free education is equality of opportunity. Because there are many families who can’t pay for the education of their children, young people from poor families can’t continue their education. This is a barrier for many intelligent young. Therefore, it must be the duty of government to make education accessible to everyone. Talented youth are an important asset of a nation. In addition to that, they can help to develop the economy of a country and make it prosper.
Second, another advantage of making education free is happiness. Nowadays we can see the students who do different jobs to earn money. This limits their leisure time and they can’t spend time with their friends. After a while, this causes students to live stressful life. However, they continue their education easily and can focus on their lectures if the education is free. Finally, they live their lives and are happy.
Finally, the free education means the more educated people. When the rate of educated people increases, societies develop. And higher education leads to productive workforce. As a result of this, countries have higher level of innovation and productivity growth. On the other hand, the educated people have more chance to find well-paid jobs. Then, they pay a lot of money to the government as a tax. In short, making education free adds a lot of things to community.
In conclusion, there are many arguments about making education free. Although it can be very expensive for state economy, its advantages help to develop country. Thanks to free education, many children who are from poor families can reach their goals. To sum up, making university education free gives people equal opportunities and this is important for society.


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  1. 1)And there are several reasons why university education should be free for everyone.=> Your thesis steatment is not clear enough.You should write reasons you meant in your thesis steatment.
    2)this causes students to live * stressful life.=> Prep.
    3)Finally, they live their lives and are happy.=> Rewrite this sentence.There is something wrong.
    You can say '...they live happily in their lives.'

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  2. 1)Talented youth are an important asset of a nation : Subject verb agreement. (1. body prag).

    2)After a while, this causes students to live * stressful life: missig article (2. body parag).

    3)And higher education leads to * productive workforce: missing article.(3. body parag).

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  3. 1) Therefore, it must be the (change article) duty of government to make education accessible to everyone.
    2) Finally, the free education means the(delete) more educated people.

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