21 Nisan 2014 Pazartesi

Cause Effect 2 - First Draft

                                                                                    OKAN ŞAHİN
                                                                                     21. 04. 2014

              THE EFFECTS OF INTERNET ON HUMAN LIFE

With the invention of the internet, there were many changes on human life. Its communication, education, and entertainment functions made it an integral part of our lives. In today’s society, people start to spend time with it at young ages. People start to think whether internet is a useful thing or not. Therefore, we can see both positive and negative effects of internet on human life.

First, the positive effects of internet are obvious on human life. Internet is a huge library: resources, books, articles, videos, comments can be found easily. This helps people to reach information quickly. For example, students can find researches easily for their courses. On the other hand, on the internet, there are many sites to spend time and to have fun for people. Whenever they want, they can watch a film, match or documentary. By watching videos they can find hobbies like painting, playing guitar.

The other positive effects of internet can be seen on human life. Internet helps people to chat with each other despite the fact that they are far places. Thanks to that, they can learn different cultures and languages. They can chat with not only strange people but also their friends. Thus, it has an important role in socializing. In addition to that, Internet allows us cheap communication. For instance, a very costly phone call which you make can be in a minimum cost on internet. In conclusion, internet saves both time and money.

On the other hand, there are negative effects of internet. Internet, with its services in various fields can be addictive. People who are addicted to internet become detached from social life. For example, children are always spending a lot of time with computer instead of playing outside with their children now. Therefore, their personal development is also not healthy. The other negative effect of internet is violence. Online violent games affect children negatively and we saw the one example of this in Germany. A student who aficionado of Counter Strike game killed his 17 friends with a gun.


In conclusion, there are both positive and negative effects of internet on human life. As internet users everything is in our hands. We mustn’t spend a lot of time with it and we must use it for our benefits. When we use anything, we mustn’t be addicted to it.  

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  1. 1-) "Internet" is a noun which is always used with "the" article, so correct all of the mistakes you wrote.

    2-) On the other hand, on the internet, there are many sites to spend time and to have fun for people. ( word order) ( paragraph 2, line 5,6)

    3-) By watching videos they can find hobbies like (such as sounds better) painting, playing guitar.

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  2. 1) In addition to that, Internet (Capitalization) allows (wrong structure) us cheap communication.
    2) For example, children are always spending a lot of time with computer instead of playing outside with their children (wrong word) now.
    3) A student who (missing something) aficionado of Counter Strike game killed his 17 friends with a gun.

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  3. 1 )As internet users* everything is in our hands : punctuation error
    2)When we use anything, we mustn’t be addicted to it : revise this sentence.

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