OKAN ŞAHİN
21. 04. 2014
THE EFFECTS OF INTERNET ON HUMAN
LIFE
With
the invention of the internet, there were many changes on human life. Its
communication, education, and entertainment functions made it an integral part
of our lives. In today’s society, people start to spend time with it at young
ages. People start to think whether internet is a useful thing or not.
Therefore, we can see both positive and negative effects of internet on human
life.
First,
the positive effects of internet are obvious on human life. Internet is a huge
library: resources, books, articles, videos, comments can be found easily. This
helps people to reach information quickly. For example, students can find
researches easily for their courses. On the other hand, on the internet, there
are many sites to spend time and to have fun for people. Whenever they want,
they can watch a film, match or documentary. By watching videos they can find
hobbies like painting, playing guitar.
The
other positive effects of internet can be seen on human life. Internet helps
people to chat with each other despite the fact that they are far places.
Thanks to that, they can learn different cultures and languages. They can chat
with not only strange people but also their friends. Thus, it has an important
role in socializing. In addition to that, Internet allows us cheap
communication. For instance, a very costly phone call which you make can be in
a minimum cost on internet. In conclusion, internet saves both time and money.
On
the other hand, there are negative effects of internet. Internet, with its
services in various fields can be addictive. People who are addicted to
internet become detached from social life. For example, children are always
spending a lot of time with computer instead of playing outside with their
children now. Therefore, their personal development is also not healthy. The
other negative effect of internet is violence. Online violent games affect
children negatively and we saw the one example of this in Germany. A student
who aficionado of Counter Strike game killed his 17 friends with a gun.
In
conclusion, there are both positive and negative effects of internet on human
life. As internet users everything is in our hands. We mustn’t spend a lot of
time with it and we must use it for our benefits. When we use anything, we
mustn’t be addicted to it.
1-) "Internet" is a noun which is always used with "the" article, so correct all of the mistakes you wrote.
YanıtlaSil2-) On the other hand, on the internet, there are many sites to spend time and to have fun for people. ( word order) ( paragraph 2, line 5,6)
3-) By watching videos they can find hobbies like (such as sounds better) painting, playing guitar.
1) In addition to that, Internet (Capitalization) allows (wrong structure) us cheap communication.
YanıtlaSil2) For example, children are always spending a lot of time with computer instead of playing outside with their children (wrong word) now.
3) A student who (missing something) aficionado of Counter Strike game killed his 17 friends with a gun.
1 )As internet users* everything is in our hands : punctuation error
YanıtlaSil2)When we use anything, we mustn’t be addicted to it : revise this sentence.